Do you like this poem?

I think that you wrote it well. Maybe add a little more detail, I know it sounds detailed to you, but that is just my opinion. Ag great place to get your writing reviewed and commented on is writing.com. I have been on there for two years, and now belong to a group of 'Preferred Authors'. Only 10% of the community get's to be preferred, so it's really neat. I think that you write well, and would be very satisfied with the review that you would get from everyone on that site, so check it out!