Does this seem like a good begining, would you be intrigued!?

You are very descriptive of the characters. The beginning of a story needs to be a foundation that let's us know what is going on. It's good to be a little vague about the characters at first, it keeps people wondering just what they're like--not too vague, just a little. Give more meaning or feeling to the surroundings to convey just what kind of mood you want. The characters will fall into place at just the right time and give the reader a great feeling of what the characters are like when and how you describe them. Focus more on the foundation of the story, how to draw people in, rather than telling them about the characters within the first two paragraphs.